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If there's no room left for me,
I'll move forwards anyways,
Because my step
Is earth itself.

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March 8, 2012
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:iconmichel-le-fou:
That is really neat!
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:icongwenvar:
*Gwenvar Mar 21, 2012   General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconmichel-le-fou:
You have a unique way with words.
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:icongwenvar:
*Gwenvar Mar 21, 2012   General Artist
Oh, thank you!
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~ozzla Mar 14, 2012   Writer
To me, there is a hidden sense of empowerment in this poem, and oddly, strikes me as a parable: that it teaches a truth of life. Although not all our steps are for improving Earth, or "society", but they are still important because we are here.
Just to help, I'll just point out that "towards" sounds as if it is "fowards", but the meaning is still the same with thought regardless. Plus, my favourite phrase is "Because my step, Is earth itself". I reckon it'll be even more powerful in meaning if there wasn't a common after step. :)
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*Gwenvar Mar 14, 2012   General Artist
And earth itself just mean, that everyone (in the poem: I) constructs his own way.
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~ozzla Mar 15, 2012   Writer
Exactly! :nod: Everyone does, even though we might like to think that it's others that have made us the way we are.
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*Gwenvar Mar 15, 2012   General Artist
Yea, when the subliminal is working, it seems like the environment is the cause. And of curse, not daring to take our responsibilities for our actions has a role too.
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*Gwenvar Mar 14, 2012   General Artist
Well, I wanted to write forwards, it's was just inadvertence.
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